My Haiku World

Posted in poetry | Tagged haiku, moon, musings, poems, poetry, reflections, relationships, reverie, sun, writing | 4 Comments

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1. on 2010/09/02 at 3:28 pm | Reply slpmartin

   Had a hard time seeing the sadness in this one…I saw more a dreamy kind of love.

   
   
   • on 2010/09/02 at 4:05 pm | Reply Robert Lew

     You may be right. Like I was saying, I actually wasn’t too sure what I had, after I wrote it. Now I’m talking like I knew exactly, but when it first came off the keyboard, I remember I was on a part of the rollercoaster that was making me a little disoriented and dizzy.

     I may have to take back what I said about being “exactly” what I intended. It’s hard to describe how this one has come about. Now it looks just right. How did it get to this place? That’s a little bit of a mystery, I think.

     It seems just right now…I think I need to say, that now it’s come to “exactly the place” that I want it to be. That’s more like it, but it doesn’t help my “poet’s ego” too much!

     
     
2. on 2010/09/02 at 10:00 am | Reply ebbtide

   this is nice… a little sad, but it feels almost like a promise that at least you’re together in memory, which made me smile :)

   
   
   • on 2010/09/02 at 10:35 am | Reply Robert Lew

     But when I got this one published, and read it back, it’s… I wasn’t sure where I “ended…”

     And it’s exactly what I intended, actually. I wrote a haiku of poetic love melancholia. There isn’t an “end,” but it’s not quite sad, either…

     
     

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