My Haiku World

Posted in poetry | Tagged dawn, haiku, musings, poems, poetry, random, reflections, thoughts, winds, writing | 4 Comments

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1. on 2009/11/16 at 1:11 pm | Reply Tyler "Hrafn" Noyes

   I really enjoy this haiku; it reminds me of the sunset I witnessed out of my 3rd-floor window a few days ago — one of the most beautiful I’ve ever witnessed. The color pink has such a special quality to it when it’s in the context of dawn or dusk. Magical.

   
   
   • on 2009/11/16 at 8:05 pm | Reply Existential Poet

     Hello, Tyler. Welcome to the blog. Glad you liked this one. I barely got it written, actually – just enough time before work this am to get one done, and this was it. I looked outside at just the right time to see the pink light of dawn. And as you said, it was magical.

     
     
2. on 2009/11/16 at 1:04 pm | Reply Existential Poet

   Hmmmm…. you might be onto something here. I changed the word, faint. I think it’s better now. Thanks, Yousei.

   This is good, really. Certain words I tend to shy away from. No good reason for it. Soft and gentle words are on that list. You know, it’s probably an artifact of male macho stuff, really.

   
   
3. on 2009/11/16 at 11:00 am | Reply Yousei Hime

   I like this too. I wonder if there is a way to further hint at the gentleness in the first line besides “faint”?

   
   

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